love the theme of family in this work, really good stuff <33

the prose and metaphors are amazing!! really love the character's perspective, and the imagery of the poem <33

this is really good!! puts me right into the action, and personally, i like that it ends open-ended, cause it leaves me to think of the how i got here, the "mistakes" ive made before and a whole lot more, amazing work <33

really lovely perspective and descriptions! <33

really amazing work for your first post, keep it up! <33

absolutely love the descriptions <33 really immersed me with the story and the mc, well doneeee <33

@None _I5 no worries XD encouragement and feedback are really helpful

i'd personally call it flash fiction, but it does definitely count as a short story! really wonderful story telling, as well as the structure of the work <3