@Usha Phoenix I am sorry for making you sads 😔

I related to every single word of this. Every word was an echo of my thoughts and feelings. Its like you saw my pain and carved it into this beautiful piece.

@Arccy Shroomie I tried something Yue did with the rhyming in her poem in using words that rhyme but not ones that you'd think of immediately when looking at the word before.

Aww thanks @wild_selenite_caffeine . I am glad I was able to really pull you into the story. Maybe I will continue this, adding before and after scenes and make it into a longer piece. We shall see how it goes.

This had me giggling birdu. Also I have seen the post about the goldfish so much this past week. I agree with Yue, besto poem ever 😊

I really get this dystopian vibe from this poem but also I feel like this is very relatable to so many things in current times. I love love love the rhymes. Its a couplet scheme but the words you rhyme are not ones I would have ever thought to rhyme. I can't wait to try doing something like this!!!

This really does tug at the heartstrings :sob: I think this one is really super relatable. I think at point or another, everyone has been here.

I agree that its more along flash fiction. I would say it might even be prose poetry? I like the way you have the rhymes within the lines. Are you planning to expand it? I think if you do, this would make a nice prologue for a longer piece.